User blog comment:Penguin40/Bloons vs Monkeys: Chapter 3/@comment-10863056-20140215231521

penguin, i see sevral problems with your fanfic.

1. you make your chapters to short.

2. it scales too fast. (most storys start with dart mokeys, and the basic red blue green and yellows)

3. grammar. Nuff said.

4. its just plain old boring.