Talk:O.N.L.I.N.E./@comment-4650748-20150406123807

Not a critic:

SPAG(Spelling punctuation and Grammar.(2lazy4fixing)): 5/10. It should be S.O.N.O.N.I.O.E not O.N.L.I.N.E., "n00b" should not have 0s in. You gave trolls a capital letter when it should not be capitalised. The first sentence of the abilities section sounds wrong. B.F.B should have dots in since you gave dots to the other blimps.

Detail: 4/10 Ahahahaha. No trivia, no info on the round it spawns at, no links to the T.R.O.L.L or the N.O.O.B etc.

Balance(Abilities, health, round it spawns at, speed.): 1/10 No speed, the only ability helps the monkeys, it does not give the round it spawns on, I can not give you higher than 1/10. It would have been 0 had you not had the health.

Creativity: 2/10 Bleh, it's not that creative. You gave almost no info, so I can't really grade you on creative abilities or anything like that.

OVERALL: 12/40 (3/10)

RATING: Could be a lot better.

MY SUGGESTED FOCUS POINTS:

Fix your awful grammar.

Make more abilities

Give speed(So I can at least do health x speed.)